I am a clock.
always on time,
never too late,
nor too early.
Being impatiently patient,
I wait for you to notice me,
in the corner of the room.
waiting.
when there's no purpose.
to you, I am like d u s t
on a shelf.
WRONG!
I am more than what you think.
Without me you'd be lost.
Not knowing what to do
and when to go.
The time is here!
I sound my alarm.
you will
hear
me.
I will be heard.
and you can't silence me.
I move constantly.
But don't worry
I always come back.
Playing with this C
L
O
C
K
of mine.
I enjoyed the structure of your poem. Just talk about more why you are a clock. You did great :)
ReplyDeleteI like how your poem is structured. The structure of it is very creative. The part where it says:
ReplyDelete"you will
hear
me"
Maybe you can change it to:
"you..
will..
hear..
me.."
great start. my suggestion, you need to make a stronger connection to the clock and talk about yourself. because if you read your poem is sounds like you are literally talking about a clock because there is no personal story from your side. add reason as to why you are those things with you own stories and not just talk about the clock. MS(3-)
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