Monday, September 22, 2014

College Essay: Final Draft

The UO is interested in learning more about you. Write an essay that shares information that we cannot find elsewhere on your application. Any topic you choose is welcome. Some ideas you might consider include your future ambitions and goals, a special talent or unusual interest that sets you apart from your peers, or a significant experience that influenced your life. (University of Oregon)

Free of artificial colors, flavors, sweeteners, or additives, The Good Lord has saved me from this toxic and complicated world by showing me the significant aspects of life. Such as the "Spirit of Aloha", Respect, and Obedience.

Aloha, in the Hawaiian language means affection, peace, compassion, and mercy. It's the "Spirit of Aloha" that the people of Hawaii have developed and live by each day. I was stricken with a condition known as lymphangioma. Lymphangioma are malformations that are soft, slow-growing masses that form mostly on the head or neck. Although, in my case, I had the mass on my organs; which is way more severe than many. Fortunately, doctors at our local hospital were able to treat me so that I can live to share my “Special" gift to the world. This gift is known as the “Spirit of Aloha”. Aloha is being a part of all, and all being a part of me. When there is pain, it is my pain. When there is joy, it is also mine.

Respect, according to merriam-webster.com, is a feeling or understanding that someone or something is important, serious, etc., and should be treated in an appropriate way. Others abuse respect by giving threats and taunting people to do whatever they say. I've always had a strong love for people with special needs. One day when I volunteered for a community service project, I saw a little girl with down syndrome and she was watching a street musician, who was also homeless. She started doing little skips that turned into leaps of joy. As others passed by, they would notice the girl and how happy she was enjoying the sound of music, and would give the street musician money. No matter how young you are and you have some sort of disability, it doesn't matter, you can make a change in someone's life. After his performance, the man had probably made a good $500 and he split that money with the little girl saying with a smile,  "Thank you little miss, go get yourself a treat". That's respect.

As I started getting involved more with my religion, Christianity, I've learned that the Lord is my Savior and we are on this earth to spread the word of The Lord. Everything I do is a reflection of Him. Just a simple smile to an elderly person or picking up litter in the park on your way back from a workout is a reflection of The Lord. I will obey His commands. 
I'm not your average shaved ice cone with artificial flavors, sweeteners, or additives; but spirited, respectful, and obedient.  

Friday, September 12, 2014

Word Choice Olympics

1. After two long years of being deployed in Afghanistan, I finally get to go home. Running out of the airport, I spot my family waiting with colorful balloons and a banner that read, "Welcome Home Daddy!". Josie, Sophia, and Cathy were screaming excitedly at the top of their lungs. Embracing my children after two years is the most incomparable feeling. "Don't worry girls, Daddy's home and he's here to stay".

2. Trina! Calm down, Cameron's not here yet, so put the gun down this instant. David's in the basement playing with action figurines. He'll be safe as long as you have the supplies to keep us alive. (*hears knocks on the door) Hurry and hide in the basement, it's the only way you and David can escape. Let's see what this crook wants now.

3. 24-25, USA leading and just one more point to win a Gold medal!As the official beckons to serve, Misty hits the ball to the far corner, landing on the line! The crowd goes wild with cheers and commotion. Misty and Kerri celebrate plummeting to the sky revealing their lower body strength. The two olympian volleyball players, proudly take their stance on the podium. Looking up at the American flag, the athletes get emotional, knowing that they made their country proud.

4.
Christmas time in New York was when it was snowing in Times Square. The Swan family spent their Christmas vacation prancing in the snow. When the Swan family arrived at their hotel, they realized that Josie was freezing cold even though she had her coat on. They decided to layer more coats on Josie until she was nice and cozy. Wow, she looked like a chubby teletubbie. When the Swan family reached Times Square, Josie waddled, fell into a pile of snow and made a snow angel. 

5.
Inside the old abandoned home at the end of the street, lived a fat, blonde pig named Harris. Pigs, like Harris, are illegal in the state of Buddabob. Police have been searching up and down  the streets for him, until they searched the abandoned house. Harris was gigantic with his monstrous body, blonde fur and sharp teeth. Police were frightened by the description of the beast, they wouldn't imagine going face to face with Harris! As they entered the house, Rob being brave, dashed into the basement and swept Harris off his feet. 

Sunday, September 7, 2014

College Essay: Draft

The UO is interested in learning more about you. Write an essay that shares information that we cannot find elsewhere on your application. Any topic you choose is welcome. Some ideas you might consider include your future ambitions and goals, a special talent or unusual interest that sets you apart from your peers, or a significant experience that influenced your life. (University of Oregon)

“Aloha”, in the Hawaiian language, means affection, peace, compassion, and mercy. It’s this “Spirit of Aloha” that us people form Hawaii have developed and live by each day.
Free of artificial colors, flavors, sweeteners, or additives, at the age of 3, the Good Lord almost saved me from this unfortunately toxic and complicated world. I was stricken with a condition known as lymphangyonma. Fortunately, doctors at our local hospital were able to treat me so that I can live to share my “Special" gift to the world. This gift is known as the “Spirit of Aloha”. 
Aloha is being a part of all, and all being a part of me. When there is pain, it is my pain. When there is joy, it is also mine. I respect all that is part of the Creator, and part of me. I will not willfully harm anyone or anything; and i truly believe that the earth, sky, and sea are mine to care for, to cherish, and protect. 
I have broken down my existence to who, what,where,when and why. “Aloha” has answers to these: Who- as being you and I, What- is the conscious creation of my reality, When- is now- the present moment that exists between the past and future, Where- is nature, and Why- is because we are here on Earth to cherish, protect and take care of this being we live upon. 

Marcus Martiota, Bronson Yim, Deforest Buckner, Isaac Ara, and Koa Ka’ai are islanders who share this same “Spirit” and attend your University. I have a lot to share, and am wiling to expand my knowledge. It would be an honor and privilege, if you’d accept me into this fine University. I’m hoping to become a Duck with spirit.